"deficit spending"

[kirk]

wrote this to start my day on saturday.....trying to maintain a more conscise direction. an excersise in maintainence of a consistent message vs a hodge podge of mulitple cross sections that are in actuality unrelated.

my mentor "gregory parldo" is working with me on this. i recommend you google him and read his work. its the real deal.

"deficit spendinig" (4rth draft)

i seek format for the words
from the source to the receptor
the fundamentals of song
fundamentally sound
the blocking and tackling
the success
that feeling on the gridiron i once prowled

this morning is different from the kind i know

in an instant steered away
pen to pad
orphan socks left separated
strangely hesitant
in straightening this space
unkempt the center
the mantle
where harmoniously once
ambers graced the darkness
the elusive illuminating warmth
since long gone

orphan socks suddenly seem
to need company
yet i am off again
a scrub brush as my only weapon
the dirt addressed
those wiry bristles
this grind
takes new form

it can be this simple - the cleanse - when finished

yet i am off again
that synthetic hum
the cycle on wrinkle rid
absent of the kick drum desired
an awkward calm
delivered
in a buzzer

cleaning house
straightening this space
incrementally
time passes on a saturday
and I wait for the afternoon ride
the one with forgotten sunshine

where finally
my vision at the minimum
finds correction

never found the eye place
after all of that
anyway

yet i am off again
waiting on wednesday
fumbling over fundamentals
a first step forward
amidst deficits spent unattentive
the funtion in format
since found


-filthy white

note: i somehow managed to match almost every orphan sock upon finishing the first draft of this....

[ZRilla]

I came up with a death row for orphan socks this weekend. They get sent to solitary and they got 30 days to find a matching partner to bail them out or else they get euthanized to keep the orphan population manageable.

[cleophite]

:lighta:

[kirk]

additional edits forthcoming....

as of 1:30am last night i found a peaceful orphanage for the stragglers however i'm happy to report that the majoirty have since found there long lost brethren and sistren.

thanks for reading.


.......a few hours later...here is a more in depth version......

deficit spending" (i've since lost track of what draft # this is)

seeking format for the words
from the source to the receptor
the fundamentals of song
fundamentally sound
the blocking and tackling
the success
that feeling on the gridiron i once prowled

this morning is different from the kind i know

all at once
off i am
at elsewhere

in an instant steered away
pen to pad
orphan socks left separated
strangely hesitant
to straighten this space
unkempt is the center
where the mantle lies
and harmonious ambers
once graced the darkness of this hearth
oft vacant of cordiality
illuminating fervor
long gone goodbye


and now at twice
a second turn
off i am
at elsewhere

the orphan socks
suddenly it seems
could use some company
the singular among many
draped unpaired alone
linger listless limply
atop their stilted abode
clinging for hope
faith that their yoke
has yet trapse
where options of return soon be no more
gazing - still - lonely

and enter at thrice
clock strikes three
off i am
at elsewhere

a scrub brush as my only weapon
umbra engaged
where tarnash has long lingered dangerously
laying in wait
diligent strokes glean
annulations of harbored residuals
exposed - exterminated - extracted
clarity unveiled in wiry bristles
and anxious scrapes
this grind
takes new form
it can be simple - the cleanse - when finished
my wordly curtain closed
spotless now

and at quaternity
concepts find juxtaposition
off i am
at elsewhere


moving past the synthetic
electric dryer droning
on wrinkle rid
the cycle orbits
abstracted is comfort
the kick drum desired
left unheard
now found audibly anew
in a buzzer
delivering awkward calm

and here it is at the sixth
a lovely street in philadelphia
off i am
at elsewhere

cleaning house
straightening this space incrementally
reconstructive passing of time
on a saturday
awaiting anxiously open
again to go on
that afternoon ride
the one with forgotten sunshine
now shining
heading forward finally
where this vision
at the minimum
will find correction
within its core

and at once again
off i am
at elsewhere

after all of that
never did i find the place
of vision care
driving in sunshine anyway
half lie smiling
like it were yesterday
seeing this for someday
when everyday
vision is twenty twenty

yet i am off again
waiting on wednesday
fumbling over fundamentals
first steps forward
amidst deficits spent unattentive
the function in format since found
momentarily


-filthy white

[kirk]

HEY MOD!


can you merge this into the March writer's thread? i was unaware it existed until after my thread post.

no need to reinvent the wheel.