Something I Wrote...

[ramz]

starting yesterday, I got a nearly uncontrollable urge that I haven't had in over a decade: to write a poem...or something roughly resembling it... I don't really know what this is, and I don't really care if it's "good" or not...It's how I'm feeling, so there...



too fast


too many
people to say the
same hi to
two million
people to show the
same smile to

too scared
to risk sharing
something sacred
true sham
to risk caring
becoming naked

is it too much
to ask to touch
someone with
something real, ideal
no spiel

are we too stuck
on me to give a fuck
about someone with
something whimsical, atypical
not simply tangible

when did we start
to fall apart
forever missing someone with
something inspired, desired
for life's meaning required

can we only be
in reality
only sometimes loving someone with
something wanted, flaunted
mere minutes spent vaunted

not to be theatrical
but that's just hypocritical
finding someone with
some generosity, comity
is not an impossibility

you can't plead for meaning
and have distrust intervening
because someone with
something true, that you'd pursue
shut out, the door closed by you

you desert island wrought
of hands yours now distraught
you thought someone with
something connected, unexpected
was just show for you, affected

those in your life speak true
concern the slightest peek to
believe in someone with
something worth a plunge for, lunge for
meaning in love, your doubt expunge for

too many
people to say the
same hi to
two million
people to show the
same smile to

too scared
to risk sharing
something sacred
true sham
to risk caring
becoming naked


to grow

[ramz]

today made me want to revisit this...maybe someone else will find it therapeutic...

[RAMIRO]

awesome werds

definitly can relate in more ways than one

[mouse]

you rit gud.

awesome stuff.

[Sylkey]

Agreed, I dig.

Very well written, with very much I can relate to, also.

Thanks for posting this.

[metagrapher]

Sometimes you write things so powerful that people don't know how to react...

Oftentimes it seems like this is what comes out when you need feedback the most.


All I can say right now is don't stop writing. Lack of significantly numerous responses is nothing to worry about. Don't know if you do, but I know I do occasionally. I've found it to indicate more than anything else that you have simply left people speechless. which is quite powerful.

Which was definitely my reaction. without words. you took them all.

[ramz]

wow... thanks... I should stress that this was put together as a purposeful mental exercise more than anything else to keep myself busy on Wednesday and Thursday of last week, and the fact that it might perhaps be "good" or whatever is strictly coincidental... I defined and confined myself to a structure that was purposefully difficult to maintain and still communicate all the everything I was feeling, which, I think, ultimately helped since I was able to deal with it all, but not all at once on a conscious level... But, yeah, the fact that it's been so well received is merely gravy... I'm really, really glad that it was able to help others going through the same fit of emotions...

[kirk]

i'll bet this sounds pretty dope spoken.....


nice work ramz

[bubblzdc]

i enjoyed reading that. i can kinda relate to it.

writing is good for the soul.